Which Job Resume Statement Is Grammatically Correct…1 Or 2?

1). Rewarded with food vouchers numerous times because of having maintained a perfect cash drawer balance for many different one month time spans.
OR
2). Rewarded with food vouchers numerous times because of having maintained a perfect cash drawer balance for many individual one month time spans.
(So basically, the word “different” OR the word “individual” in the sentence.).

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4 Responses to “Which Job Resume Statement Is Grammatically Correct…1 Or 2?”

  1. Billy says:

    I can’t make sense of either. What is your native language?

  2. Hotmx says:

    Rewarded with food vouchers numerous times because of having maintained a perfect cash drawer balance for many individual months.
    ^^^Reads better.
    Right?

  3. Caroline says:

    I’d recommend 3) Recognized several times for having perfect cash drawer balance
    “Rewarded with food vouchers” is too much information, and the way you’ve phrased it is way too confusing and wordy. The idea behind a resume is to state the facts without revealing so much that your interviewer has no questions for you. With what I’ve suggested, if I were reviewing your resume, I would take note of that and ask you about it…”How often did this occur? How were you recognized?” for example.
    Hope that helps.

  4. Mamie says:

    You’re putting the cart before the horse. Your prospective employer cares what you can do for him… not what happened to you. Here’s a re-write:
    Maintained a perfect cash drawer balance over many separate months and received rewards for doing that.

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